I’m really late for Julia’s challenge this week. The prompt is ‘Legacy’ , the fourth in a series of Olympic themes, but people may have interpreted it in different ways. Check them here,
http://jfb57.wordpress.com/2012/08/13/100-word-challenge-for-grown-ups-week54/
Oliver’s Legacy
Dear Oliver
You know, I wept every day for six months, I was so lost.
And now I’m angry. If you had had a car accident or even been attacked it would be different, but you had a choice, and you put diving first every time.
You said it was safe, no one died jumping off a high board. So what do you do? Get your Gold and then fool around, one step too far.
I can’t undo what’s happened. Olympia has arrived now; she looks at me with your eyes. Your legacy, but she will be frightened of water.
Sophie
You fit so much into these few words – the dead man’s obsession, the wife or lover’s grief and resentment, the long lonely months of waiting for Olympia to arrive. Another beautifully told story!
Powerful… sad. legacy.
Great use of the prompt, Gilly. I like the letter format, but – more – the frustration, while sad, rings true. That slight tone of accusation toward Oliver is so nicely done, and so real. Lovely work!
It’s not easy to convey this kind of bitterness, but you managed it. Nice one.
Such tragedy, and described so calmly. Well done!
Moving story. Makes me sad because of the loss and of the little girl that will grow up without her father.
The perfect words expressing a Mother’s anguish. The legacy is there
but so is the pain. Touching …!!!!!
Poor Olympia will have to forgo water sports whether she likes it or not! Brilliant Gilly
Nice job! Poignant last line, it sums up the story perfectly.
Brilliant Gilly. This was so touching.
oh dear, i was going to say “brilliant gilly” but the last comment says just that, can I just say “Ditto!”
What a brilliant legacy x
Poignantly written.
Oh my. Good one. Never would have thought of something like this.
Very good use of 100 words. I loved it.