Julia has given us ‘would seven prove to be too much’ and another hundred words to play with for her challenge this week. Will you join in this time? It’s fun and a good way to see how briefly you can tell a story. Try here,
http://jfb57.wordpress.com/2012/08/06/100-word-challenge-for-grown-ups-week-53/
and now for my entry.
Fiacre’s Seven Seeds
‘Will I be able to look after them all?’ Fiacre counted the seeds in his hand.
‘Ah, would seven prove to be too much? That’s the question I asked myself when I was your size’
‘What if they grow too big for my vegetable plot grandfather?
‘Let’s leave your little garden for a moment child, come, look to the east.’ A vast cultivated valley spread a green carpet as far as the boy could see. ‘The great creator gave my grandfathers grandfather seven seeds. Tell me, are these crops too much, too much too feed our people?
‘Grandfather, will seven seeds be enough?’
I would use this with my grandchildren. Great lesson here.
L.O.V.E. love this. I hear the child’s voice–so sweet and innocent.
Wow but you are good at this.. I think I’m to verbose for such a challenge…
Excellent Gilly! You are a great storyteller!
Great read! Good use of 100 words!
I love it; and indeed some seeds do grow too big – we have pumpkin overgrowing nightmares at the moment from just a few small seeds
Its lovely Gilly, I love your use of the child’s voice, innocent but growing up, as the seeds are …
This reads almost like a proverb Gilly – really good one. Well done. And what a lovely name too.
Wonderful little vignette, Gilly. Every word counts. Well done.
Aw this is so lovely. I can really ‘hear’ the child’s voice. I might tell this story to my son when he’s old enough to appreciate it!
I love this Gilly – one of my favourites this week.
An important lesson – shown and not preached. Well done!
brilliant!!! you are a wonderful writer gilly
Excellent tale! Loved it!
A fine write up, Gilly.