I missed last weeks challenge. I used the excuse of being away, but actually it was just too difficult. This week Julia has returned to her more usual prompt of a few words . . . I blamed it on the dog . . . much more my scene. If you would like to join in, or read some of the other entries, pop across to http://jfb57.wordpress.com/2012/07/02/100-word-challenge-for-grown-ups-week-48/
Meanwhile here is my entry.
A Bit of a Tickle
‘Forty years, that’s how long I’ve known her. I never thought she’d leave me. There’s not a day we’ve been apart. We never wanted kids – decided it would be just the two of us.’
‘Sorry mate, I’m not one for weeping, never had cause, we’ve always been so happy.’ The man, who looked far too young for that kind of work averted his eyes and muttered ‘No worries.’
‘She had a bit of a tickle, touch of allergy she said. I think I’ll be following her; I can’t live with this guilt you see. Passive smoking causes cancer. That cough, I blamed it on the dog.’
Oh. Oh my.
Nicely characterized, and so poignant when we get to the end and find out why and how she left him.
This was so sad Gilly. I hope he works through the guilt and doesn’t give up. I’m sure she wouldn’t want him to follow her *there* so soon.
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment for Phoebe by the way – she’ll be really chuffed.
Very nicely done. You managed to convey many complexities of a relationship so succinctly.
Poor doggies … getting blames. MMmmm …. nicely done, Gilly.
A very interesting direction on this one.
Toodles,
Izzy
Good anti tobacco campaign Gilly
Loved it.
So sad and agree with newpillowtalk – want to give him a hug!
I love the humor in this one… Blame the dog for everything huh?
Fine words, a touch sad but the message is clear. Good shot.
This is powerful, Gilly! You are SO good!
I kept reading not realizing what was coming. Love the impact. Very powerful.