Julia http://jfb57.wordpress.com/2012/06/18/100-word-challenge-for-grown-ups-week46/ thinks her prompt . . . in the dark recess of my mind . . . is straightforward this week, well not for my impoverished mind! Equally challenging will be making this page line up as I want it to but here goes.
Electric Recess
In the dark recess of my mind, drowning, overwrought and burdened
a brand new demon idles there but
The memory cannot linger forever. Forks of light slash through clouds with
intent to throw open the path
Dark as the night once shared. Storms resounded in those arteries that now are scoured of plaque.
Recess littered with nightmares, fossil formed, now queuing to
be purged, volted electrically
Of hallucinatory dervish spinning a reel, reaching a hand to heaven, stabbing
a hand to earth, relentless chaotic earth.
My sanguine fluid put on hold, damned and damned forever to ease my tormented
Mind.
scary!
Sorry … I don’t often do ‘dark’
This is amazing!
Thanks Eva
Wow… So much here, I see chaos and pain, but inside a horrific (though beautiful) abstraction of thoughts. Perhaps the mind of madness? Or might I understand the specifics better with further readings? Wow.
Goodness thanks for your kind words
That was so well written and very tormented …. old nightmares repeating again and again ….
Thank you i’m flattered
Wonderful piece of writing. Very disturbing though.
Thanks, I don’t really do poetry!
Dark indeed! Sounds like he is having a heart attack!
electro convulsive therapy!
How on earth do you conjure up such things?
Search me it just pops into my head (recesses even!)
Intense and powerful. Your words strikes like lightening and resonates like thunder on a quiet night. Beautiful words…
and your comments are really lovely
thank you so much!
Hi! I wrote a poem in college that, while completely different in other ways, was pretty much as dark as this. I had a copy of Poet’s Market, and I chose a publisher of a little tiny company. I mailed him my poem, and about ten days later I got my poem back. Written in red over the text: You should see a therapist. I was angry. The world of poetry needs every mood and point of view — macabre, sinister, and dark are needed as much as any other mood. Great poem — I loved it! (And the publisher was right about me needing to see a therapist!)
Hahaha Judith I am a therapist! I hope it worked for you! I don’t often go this dark. Thanks for visiting
Heeheeheeheehee!
oooh so dark and intense- love it! x
Thank you Jenny,I don’t do poetry so I don’t know how it happened!
Very dark indeed! Well done for doing poetry when it’s not something you feel comfortable with. It’s a great interpretation of the prompt.
Thank you, I like to push against my self imposed boundaries some times!
Yu did an awesome post even with your reservations about poetry.
Thank you I hope it isn’t too weird!
Crumbs! Are you feeling better now? I still haven’t managed anything for this. Both my attempts have been much much longer…
Heehee did you think it was my experience? It’s just my crazy imagination!
BRAVA!!!! Your talent for creating powerful imagery is HUGE!!
ps. I just noticed you changed your blog’s tagline, and that makes me happy! IMO, you’ve been a writer since the day 1 of your blog!
Gosh thank you, you’re an angel! I’m amazed that anyone ‘got’ it. yes I change d the tag line a few weeks ago – thanks to you and others I believe. I still have trouble with it because I’m not writing as much as I want or can.
The recesses of the mind coming to the surface creating a brilliant write.
Well done ….